Now since that we finished our first rough draft of our paper, we have been able to talk about what is wrong and also what is writing within our papers. This is a positive apect when it comes to research writing.
Three changes that I will be making due to comments and input that I got from my classmates and other friends, are to make my paper more personal, try a different type of formatting in certain parts of my paper to make my paper more easily read and to add captions to my paper to help visualize what I am explaining.
To make my paper more personal and less informal I will be using peoples first names such as Mike instead of Mr. Michael Sorace. This will allow my readers to also feel like they know Mike instead of just some guy I am writing about. It will let my readers feel more like they know him.
Secondly I have to work on the format of my paper, this will let my citations be correct and will also allow me to correctly analyze my information. This will also permit me to have the right formatting that in the end will allow my readers to understand my paper. Which it will also let my readers understand my paper more clearly.
Finally I will add more than one photo in my research paper. Adding this is a positive because it will allow my readers to actually visualize what I am describing. This actually will let my readers see what I am talking about instead of just having to make a mental photo. I feel like the photos will make my paper more emotional and help with my discussion.
